Thread: Resume Critique

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    Default Resume Critique

    Please take a look at the following resume and let me know your opinions and suggestions. Thank you.





    Nicholas Walter Hickman
    XXXXX N.X. X2 St.
    XXXXXXX City, Oklahoma 7XXX2
    Phone: (XX5) 2X6-XXX1
    E-Mail: XXXXX1698@hotmail.com[/email]

    OBJECTIVE
    To obtain a sworn position as a XXXXX fire fighter that will afford me the opportunity to serve the community.

    EDUCATION
    Graduated May 2002: Oklahoma State University Stillwater, OK
    Bachelor of Science, Business Administration Majors (3): International Business, Marketing, Spanish
    Major GPA: 3.5/4.0
    Awards/Scholarships: Tuition Waiver Scholarship, Deanís Honor Roll,
    Deanís List of Distinguished Students

    Emergency Medical Technician-Basic Meridian Technology Center Stillwater, OK

    WORK EXPERIENCE
    2003-Present Public Health Educator Oklahoma State Department of Health
    *Teach CPR/First Aid Classes to individuals/groups in the community.
    *Educate youth about injury prevention through Risk Watch.
    *Write press releases regarding a variety of health issues and concerns.
    *Represent Health Department at community meetings and events.
    *Attend continuing education trainings throughout Oklahoma.
    *Coordinate BT preparedness in Logan County.
    *Research and write grants for communities.

    2000-2003 Foreman Patio Club Apartments Stillwater, OK
    *Managed general work crew.
    *Reported to management the daily activities of employees.
    *Maintained and repair tenantsí residences.
    *Trained new employees on company procedures.
    *On call to aide in emergencies during off hours.

    2000-2001 President Sigma Phi Epsilon Fraternity Stillwater, OK
    *Presided over fraternity consisting of 100+ members.
    *Recruited new members to join fraternity.
    *Developed annual budget.
    *Delegated responsibility among executive members.
    *Represented fraternity at weekly Inter-Fraternity Council Meetings.
    *Communicated weekly with alumni board and university officials.
    *Implemented new policies for fraternity.
    *Assembled members to actively participate in fraternity duties.
    *Enforced bylaws and expectations.
    *Trained next president.

    VOLUNTEER WORK
    Friends of the Library, Habitat for Humanity, Juke Joint Jog, The Big Event, Race for the Cure
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    Lightbulb looks good BUT....

    You may want to remove your personal information from this thread, for your own protection (you just can't be too careful these days). The resume looks great though, very well laid out and easy to read format.

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    Thanks for the help, did not think of to remove personal info. now I am not able to edit it.

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    Wink 2 cents...

    #1- I would also delte or edit your personal info.

    #2- Get some more info. or ideas from Capt. Bob
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    There should be an "edit" button at the bottom of your posting. This allows the author to edit or remove the posting.

    There's no harm in putting experience first. In fact, your education as an EMT-B rather magnifies the fact that you don't have fire training. We so often say that training is just a portion of what departments want to know, but I wouldn't start with education primarily because it's not often a big consideration. If someone is FF2, Haz-Mat Ops, Rescue Systems, etc, etc... yeah pronounce that within the resume & oral if you can slide it in about this being a way you've prepared for the position. The BS from OSU is terrific, and it's impressive to many looking at your resume, but it's not gonna sell you. Spanish? Use that to your advantage, especially given our need for language assistance. Sometimes less can be more. The business part of your degrees might distract an oral board ("this kid wants to RUN a fire department -- he wants MY job"). While the fraternity portion of your experience shows leadership, it may (and others please weigh in on this too) come with a negative connotation, so I'd leave it off if you can live without it there. I'm impressed with the consistency of verb tense, as most people will write in past and present in the same list. What's a sworn position? Is this volunteer, full time? It may be clarified to assist anyone else who's reading it. As for other little things, maybe writing "phone:" or "email:" at the top is redundant and takes valuable space the eyes don't need to look at. The number & your address with the @ should be evident to the reader. As for dates & places of employment or school, I would try to set them off in a subtle way (underline, bold, italics) just to create some separation from other items. Words & other things blending together in a structured document just frustrate readers. Good luck!
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    Thanks for the help. All of this is great information. I have little to no experience in terms of firefighting so all I know to put on there is my education. This is the dilemna I am encountering. Thanks again Kevin for the great help. I have not been able to EDIT the post.

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    Default Edit?

    Hmmm.... I can't recall the younger days of posting. Maybe one has to be a senior member to edit postings. Until then, you junior members and guests get mocked & ridiculed for mistakes or whatnot!!
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    Default Better format

    Here's a one page sample:

    Carl Mcfly
    1284 Main St.
    Kensington, Ca 94588
    Phone: 510-286-5890 e-mail: Iwantafirejob@aol.com

    OBJECTIVE: To achieve a level within the fire service.

    PROFESSIONAL EXPERIENCE:

    Firefighter Fire Department, CA 2-00 Present
    Duties include but are not limited to fire suppression in structural as well as wild land environments and emergency medical services under highly stressful emergency conditions. Also, fire prevention, public education, vehicle and station maintenance under the supervision of a Captain, always focusing on providing quality customer service.

    Engineer (Acting) 2-03 Present

    Firefighter Fire Department (Auxiliary) 3-99 2-00
    Perform in a probationary capacity under emergency situations, fire suppression, emergency medical services, also fire prevention, public education, vehicle and station maintenance.

    EMT Ambulance Service, CA 3-99 2-00
    Perform under emergency situations; emergency medical services under the direction of Redondo Beach and L.A. County Fire Department Paramedics. Vehicle and station maintenance and Code-3 driving.

    INSTRUCTOR Emergency Response CPR 3-03 Present
    Adult, Child, & Infant CPR training for the community as well as for the professional rescuer.

    Owner/Operator Pool Company, CA 5-97 2-00
    Service and repair of residential and commercial pools and spas according to County Health Department specifications.

    EDUCATION: (is space is needed to keep on one page, these can be placed in two columns)

    Bachelorís Degree
    EMT Defib and Combitube certified
    Firefighter I
    Red Cross certified CPR Instructor
    Firefighter II
    Federal Red Card System Member
    Driver/Operator State certified
    Class B Driverís License

    If you have space left using a size 12 fount on the first page you can add:

    ACTIVITIES
    Member of State University Track and Field Team.
    Member of State University X-Country Team.
    Volunteer for Hubbs Institute White Sea Bass Population Restoration Project.
    Volunteer for Red Cross on various projects

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